The Cat And The Mongoose

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Soham
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Fri Dec 23, 2005 11:48 am
Soham says... · Fri Dec 23, 2005 11:48 am
The cat and the mongoose went sailing on a boat
They were balming each other for not bringing a coat
The boat ran aground
But none of them drowned
Because the sea had turned into a moat!!
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Fri Dec 23, 2005 7:17 pm
Elizabeth says... · Fri Dec 23, 2005 7:17 pm
Oh my God!
This was hilarious!
I have never read such a lovely limerick... not even that one about the man from Peru or the one about the Wendy's clown!

I liked this a lot! Good work! (Of course I'm a nerd) This was childish in a good way!
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Fri Dec 23, 2005 7:25 pm
Emma says... · Fri Dec 23, 2005 7:25 pm
Fun. Short and sweet! I liked it. TBR forced me to comment and read this... <____<; so I have no idea what to say because I suck when it comes to poems and limericks.
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Fri Dec 23, 2005 8:55 pm
Firestarter says... · Fri Dec 23, 2005 8:55 pm
Haha, cool.

Limericks are fun.
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Sat Dec 24, 2005 2:06 am
antigone says... · Sat Dec 24, 2005 2:06 am
Cool! I hate wearing coats.
Siempre, siempre: jardin de mi agonia,
tu cuerpo fugitivo para siempre,
la sangre de tus venas en mi boca,
tu boca ya sin luz para mi muerte.
-From 'Del amor imprevisto', Federico Garcia Lorca
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Tue Dec 27, 2005 1:45 am
Snoink says... · Tue Dec 27, 2005 1:45 am
Yay! A limerick. :)

I would suggest taking out the exclamation marks at the end, because they make the piece sound a little bit too enthusiastic, and it ends up sounds too hyper. A period, or even one exclamation mark, is fine.
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Fri Dec 30, 2005 8:43 pm
zelithon says... · Fri Dec 30, 2005 8:43 pm
Brilliant! Exraorinary!! Fantastic! Humor! It made my lauph, it made me cy. I was amused. Reminds me of the peom about the owl and the pussy cat. :lol:
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