Wishes and Fishes

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This was also posted to the informal Poetry Contest in Time Wasters, but I decided that I wanted actual feedback on it so...

Edit: This is not supposed to make any sense, so....

If wishes were fishes
and I am a fish,
why can't I grant
my own wish?

I'm sorry but I don't like this poem. It just doesn't make sence. You go all over the place without explaining anything. I don't understand what your getting at. And your logic is all wrong. If wishes were fishes and you were a fish then you would be a wish a so no you couldn't grant your own wish. Also to make better sence it should read:

If wishes were fishes
and I was a fish,
why couldn't I grant
my own wish?

I'm sorry to be so harsh but this just didn't work in my opinion and you need to think about how you could make it make more sence.
I look forward to another version of it.

I actually really like it, Idraxx

I love it

Could be longer thought it kinda cute though.

Extremely short, but SOOOOO CUUUUTE!
I loved it! and thought it made perfect sense in an otherworldy-random way. Had kind of a curious toddler theme going on. The last line made it. Delightful and hilarious, I must say. Even a little thought provoking, haha. Don't listen to the people who put this poem down. Keep writing!
Sincerely,
Klotrox
P.S. Make like a mini-series of these poems. That would be fun!

First let me say it is the shortest poem I have ever reviewed. Not only that, but i like the flawless effort you put into writing this mini poem. It made sense to me btw, despite what you said about not making sense.
Keep writing, and do make a mini series of poems like this one.

Nomnomnom

awww thats such a nyc short as poem.