Scars Grow More

I will give if u will take My heart and promise not to break.
Our scars are bigger then our hearts, wounds bigger than should be.
We've seen love com we've seen it go.
scars grow more wounds go deep.
We've heard it said more then once, we know its sound we know its root.
scars grow more wounds go deep.
I'll never go they say so soft as we watch them dance away, in false belief we wait and see if its truly meant to be.
scars grow more wounds go deep
as tears roll down are aging cheeks with shattered dreams and broken hearts, our life’s are torn there in complete whats a heart with out a beat?
scars grow more wounds go deep.
I'm walking down life’s darkened streets when right beside i heard you speak like a song within my heart i felt the words begin to beat, "I will give if u will take My heart and promise not to break" i looked into my beating heart clean and free from binding scars nothing more then forgotten marrs. i heard my voice come from my heart speaking saying "I will take and i will give together well eternal live"
Now love grows more and Joy go deep.
Her heart that day I'll ways keep

-Devin F.

I will give if u will take My heart and promise not to break.
Our scars are bigger then our hearts, wounds bigger than should be.

This is a little bit hard to follow. Re-phrasing this will help
Maybe you could change it up a bit?

Example: Promise to take my heart
Promise not to break it,
and I will give to you.

Our scars our bigger than our hearts,
bigger than they should be.

We've seen love com we've seen it go.
scars grow more wounds go deep.
We've heard it said more then once, we know its sound we know its root.
scars grow more wounds go deep.

We've seen love come,
and we've seen it go.

Scars grow more,
and wounds go deep.

We've heart it said more than once:
we know its sound,
and we know its root.

Scars Grow more,
and wounds go deep.

I'll never go they say so soft as we watch them dance away, in false belief we wait and see if its truly meant to be.
scars grow more wounds go deep

I'll never go they say,
so soft as we watch them dance away.

A false belief we wait,
and we see if it is meant to be.

Scars grow more,
and wounds go deep.

as tears roll down are aging cheeks with shattered dreams and broken hearts, our life’s are torn there in complete whats a heart with out a beat?
scars grow more wounds go deep.

As tears roll down our aging cheeks
shattered dreams and broken hearts,

our lives are torn there in complete,
and what is a heart without a beat?

Scars grow more,
and wounds go deep.

I'm walking down life’s darkened streets when right beside i heard you speak like a song within my heart i felt the words begin to beat, "I will give if u will take My heart and promise not to break" i looked into my beating heart clean and free from binding scars nothing more then forgotten marrs.

I'm walking down life's darken streets,
and I hear you speal like a song within my heart.

I felt the words began to beat,
"I will give if you take my heart and promise not to break it."

I looked into my beating heart
clean and free from bind scars.

They're forgotten like marrs. (Marrs?)

i heard my voice come from my heart speaking saying "I will take and i will give together well eternal live"
Now love grows more and Joy go deep.
Her heart that day I'll ways keep

I heard my voice from from my heart,
"I will take and I will give together well eternal live".

Now love grows more,
and joy goes deep

Her heart that Day,
I will always keep.





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A few times I had a little bit of a hard time reading this. You just need to work on your tenses and the flowing of your poetry.
This was a lovely poem, just a few spelling mistakes.

thank you very much for the help! spelling isnt one of my strong points lol i worte this at about 2 in the moring so im sure theres evern more that could be helped lol

Great poom! i really liked it. Im going to piggyback off the first person that reviewed your poem. There could be some grammatical improvements like:

Maki-Chan wrote:wounds bigger than should be

Should probably be "bigger than they should be". The format you wrote in makes it sort of hard to understand, but overall you did a good job with your repition and staying steady with your general idea. My only thing is the format, thats it really. All you have to do is tidy that up and you will be writing some great stuff soon. Look to hear from you or at least read some more of your stuff soon =D Keep up the good work and always do your best!

thanks! im still not sure how to get points to add more poems!