Alive

A thunderstorm of sparks,
Inspiration, Intuition.
Knowledge is power
And she's overflowing with it.
Bonds will never break
With new stars that surround her.
And she can be her,
Happy or sad.
Independent woman
Living for only her.
The silent angel,
A guardian, an ally
Against the darkness.
Bright stars enlighten her-
Her beauty finally visible
Through her scars,
Slowly gleaning.
Should a thundercloud
Darken her sun
She'll dance to the other side,
Ever stonger.
You want to bring her down?
Bring it on -
She's a fighter,
A spirit living forever,
Alive.

Aw. This is sweet. I liked it.

I liked it. It said to me that you can be anyone you want to be, and it doesn't matter what people think of you.

I really like this. Very inspiring and Descriptive!!! I can feel the emotion and dedication you placed in this!!! I love it and can't wait to read more of your works!!! Good luck and keep up the good works!!! May you receive many reviews and that you improve ^^ Happy Writing!!
Soulkana<3

Hello there,

First Impression:
My first impression of this piece of writing was that it was very very descriptive and had many emotions clearly displayed.

Good Things:
- The descriptive language such as " beauty" and "gleaning"
- The amount of effort. (I can clearly see the amount of effort in this piece!)
- The amount of emotion clearly shown

Bad Things:
- The layout : This may just be my opinion but the layout of this piece of writing just bugs me a little. It's not clear enough. I personally find it hard to read. If you separated these into sections it might make it a little easier to read.

Like or Dislike:
I Do like this poem , I find it clear to read .

Overall:
9 and a half /10


Thank you
Lorna
xx