Skies Falling Gound Uprising

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The skies falling the ground Uprising.

Nothing alike I know that’s surprising.

The wind is strong that means we don’t belong.

Didn’t last long you wonder what you did wrong?

Is it not obvious? This happened on purpose.

I broke up with you I threw you away.

You pray and wish you could stay.

Its over get over it. I quit now we split.

Please don’t cry you find a better guy.

Life goes on from dust to dawn.

Walk out the door there is no more.

We will find new people at the top of the steeple.

We fall hard and get scarred but we live.

We give and strive to live on.

The skies falling the ground rising.

Nothing alike I know that’s surprising.
Sleep Walk-Bohnenberger




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Im semi confused by this dude. I dont know if you were intending on being vague but thats how i envisioned it. There was alot of bouncing around and your initial idea was never really completely explained. creative but not entirely grammatically correct or descrriptive. It was good at best keep it up though you should excell soon.
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I understand man, first poem I ever wrote when I was 11 so I put it on here to see what people would think. But yea man I understand. I am not really a poem writer anyways, I write novels.
Sleep Walk-Bohnenberger



If you're paranoid that you're making your novel worse with each passing decision clap your hands
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