El 'Mo'

There is a dark skinned cowboy
who runs the mexican ridges of
the Tiajuana river valley
his pointed boot spurs glinting in the sun
his hat tipped just so
and the Gauchos have a name for
this epitome of the west
El 'Mo'

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based of a guy I know.

cheers CL

Hey! This is quite nice!

It shows what can be done in the minimum of words. I liked the subtle imagery too. It flows effortlessly!

Nothing much is technically wrong with it. I have only one small nit to pick though:

who runs the mexican ridges of
the Tiajuana river valley

I think this should be capitalised. But this is insignificant.

Fab!

thankies dear, I'll think about the capitalization

CL

This is an awesome piece, the format makes it flow so magnificently. It's quite a clever piece, using few words to get a point across. I like it a lot.

Thank you Superfreakazoid, I'm glad you liked it.

cheers CL

i like this alot, nice and short, puts a vivid picture in my mind... it made me smile. i like how the rhyme is really subtle and casual; i think its really hard to make rhyming effective and not get in the way of the poems message, but you did it really well.

I liked it I liked the witty El'Mo line at the end the most.

heheh... I think I will give this to EL Mo for a christmas present.

thanks guys. CL

That would be an awesome Christmas present! He'll like it a lot.