Nothing

Just nothing

Wow. You have a passion I could never even dream of having. I love the way you worded everything, kept me interested until the end (and even still now).
I only spotted one word problem:

I was worth nothing and never would be.

Okay, I'm thinking you meant "I was worth nothing, and always would be."?

Overall, I love this! Makes one wonder what she's depressed about...

Keep writing; you have amazing talent.

~LiveLifeLoud

This made me both very sad and very proud. I don't know you, so to say I'm proud may seem a little invading, but none the less, I am proud that you have managed to attend to such a disgusting emotion, such a dangerous place, with beauty and clarity.
You made every word ache the way that it feels to ache in those moments that make us want to die.
I know exactly what it is that you talk of when you say that you loathe then sun, I loathed it too. It's too bright, it's invading and it almost seems to taunt.
You are a wonderful writer, certainly keep this up and make sure that you read as much as possible to broaden your mind and keep you full of ideas.
If you enjoy poetry, you may enjoy some of the work of Sylvia Plath and Anne Sexton, they're wonderful, but deeply disturbed poets. They make what is awful, beautiful. All things have the capacity to show beauty, like you have done here.
Also, I have written a few things you may be interested in, seeing as you have as much of a loathing for the sun as I do: am poem of mine called 'Mother', and another called 'New Eyes'. I hope that you are well and that you have wrestled these emotions to the ground. They are but voices in your head, and they are lying to you, but that is not to say that you have to listen. Be strong

This is awesome! I love your details, like the ant, and the emotion you put in here. It is clear and easy to understand, and it's interesting, exciting. I did catch a few spelling mistakes, but not bad. And now I can't remember what they were. I think you could work on the actual spoke dialogue. I mean, the whole story is written from her point of view, and she is really thoughtful and pondering. But when she screams, it just seemed plain. Not colorful enough (no, that's not the word I'm looking for...) But, I do think you could add something here. We know she doesn't understand, so make her screams sound more emotional? I aslo think you could do better on the ending. It felt off compared to the rest of the story. Hopefully this review made some sense. Anyway, all in all, this is a great story!!

Greetings!

Interesting piece of work. I like the amount of emotion and thought in it - you give a very intricate view of your characters perspective. At some points it does dip into emoism a little. A character who hates the sun is interesting, one who used to be so happy and now isn't.

There is a relatable aspect to your writing, but still phrases like "they didn't understand, the people who said they loved me,' though they are things that people can relate to, they're also quite angsty, and that's something that gets tiring very quickly. Like a cliche, it's harder to empathise with because it's been heard more times than not - that, and there isn't much empathy between your character and the others of whom he/she speaks.

Lastly - Capslock! Streams of capitcal letters are ugly, and for some people they're painful or difficult to read. It's much more effective to find another form of expression without having to depend on capital letters.

Overall this seems a bit too raw, there is the emotion and substance, but it needs a bit more work to make it a story or a piece, rather than a stream of thought. Keep it up, though, there is much potential.

Wow.
This story is amazing! It captures all your mind into it and lets you imagine all the details. I love your style of writing(:
Keep up the great work!