My Perfect Girl

Wow! That was... TOUCHING ! I really loved it! How awesomely sweet.

Im sure you'll find her one day! Just you wait!

I read it. First off- I'll have you know that I'm a Christian, too. You probably come from a household that stresses purity, etc. So do I. That must have been your inspiration.

Anyway, I didn't like it that much. The awkward combination of realism and romanticism made it seem utterly stream-of-conscious/what-I-think-ey. Those with a more critical eye, such as ^pup^, touched on this before me (as did MMM, in an explosion of experienced rhetoric ). While I do hold your same opinions on this matter of having a faithful marriage, I do think that a good poem should possess one ideology or the other.

In other words, you should express either a realistic standpoint, or a good vs. bad standpoint. But, you chose to break those boundaries, and decided (probably inadvertently) to skip between the two- romanticism and realism.

Upon thinking about it for a bit, I've found that this was admirable. Your poem was a shaky attempt at touching both the spirit and actuality of Love, and I'm not one to talk about trying new things, but I think this was a worthwhile read. It aptly portrayed the side of Love that modern, Western culture is often blinded to.

So, kudos, but it was still shaky. (Nonetheless better than I could've written it ) Keep writing!

Hi JesusFreak900,
Haha wow. Your poem is amazing. From this you sound like "the perfect guy" haha. If you ever right a girl poetry like this I'm sure she'll try hard to be "your perfect girl" You've obviously made all us yws girls swoon
Good luck find you your perfect girl

Wow! I like your poem - truly touching and full of emotions. I love how you chose your words which makes your poem so alive. Thumbs up! xD Keep writing

This is one of the best poems I've ever read! It was so beautiful and vehement, and I can't think of anything else to say right now because I'm just speechless right now... Loved it!