Introduction

What if all of a sudden all you believed in was just... myth?


This was how Alexis Stark felt when she witnessed the death of her bestfriend, Erik. Not only that, but the way he died... is chilling. Nothing felt real anymore. Alexis flinches everytime she sees a hand moving in her direction. She locks herself up in her room, day after day, too scared to face reality. The counseling just made her feel worse, scaring her deeper into her lonely, scarred thoughts.

This is...
People Lie...

Hi there! Welcome to the site!

I'll start off by saying that this definitely pulled me into this stroy. You did a good job giving us enough details to keep us informed, but there isn't enough to make me stop reading. I want to know what happens next. I want to know who killed Alexis's best friend. Who was her best friend? Why was her best friend killed? I have so many questions, but I know they will be answered once more chapters are added.

There are a few grammer errors in this, but I'm sure once you read this over again, you'll find them. You switched from past to present tense a lot. You should pick one and stick to it. Also, you used an ellipsis (is that how you spell it?) a couple times as well. I personally don't think you need them, but it's not necessary to change where/how they are used.

Overall this is a good start. Let me know when you post more! Keep writing!

You definitly got me excited for this story! It sounds good, I love to read this when you do post it.
The only thing I wanted to say was this (correction in red):

Not only that, but the way he died... is chilling #FF0000 ">was . . . chilling.

I'm sorry if I was no help!