9/11 Revisited

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Where's the smoke?
Where's the plane?
Where's the fire?
Where's the game?

Who is right?
Who is wrong?
Who is here?
Who doesn't belong?

What is that?
Why did we die?
Why do we laugh?
Why do we cry?

Who do we blame?
Who do we kill?
Who is our scapegoat?
Where is the thrill?




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This is a very difficult topic to put into words, and even harder to get ALL of the topic in one poem. Thus, I applaud you for the attempt.
I like the style: in questions, short ones at that.
But I have to ask, where is the last set of questions getting at? I know as much about 9/11 as the next person, but the last four questions have me puzzled. Is this from the POV of the terrorists? I wish it were more defined, but that might be just me.
Lastly, where is this poem going? It kind of doesn't seem to have a conclusion, or a good ending; it just keeps you hanging at a confusing spot. I'm not a poetry expert, but it might need a little extra thought.




Random avatar
Gender Female
Points 1090
Reviews 3
This is a very difficult topic to put into words, and even harder to get ALL of the topic in one poem. Thus, I applaud you for the attempt.
I like the style: in questions, short ones at that.
But I have to ask, where is the last set of questions getting at? I know as much about 9/11 as the next person, but the last four questions have me puzzled. Is this from the POV of the terrorists? I wish it were more defined, but that might be just me.
Lastly, where is this poem going? It kind of doesn't seem to have a conclusion, or a good ending; it just keeps you hanging at a confusing spot. I'm not a poetry expert, but it might need a little extra thought.



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