Tell me what you think. I wrote this yesterday.

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It's um... very... um... periodic! But this isn't the write place to post it... and it's sort of short... XD

You seem to be a new member. Welcome!

Mac

All I see is a periode...
But, anyways, welcome! I'm new here myself.

How do you do, Winston? We here at the Society hope you'll find everything to your liking.

Be sure to visit the chat when you have a free moment. You can find it on the homepage or under 'Community'. There should be someone there most of the time; if not, it's rather fun to talk to yourself.

Hi, welcome!

I think what you've written is amazing. The brevity of it just takes my breath away and- okay all I see is a period too. But perhaps someone with a better imagination will come by and give you a review on it

Hai! I hope you're settling in nicely at YWS. If you have any questions, drop me a pm and I'll see if I can help out. I also write reviews on more lengthy pieces than your uh... beautiful period so if you happen to need one of those, let me know!

Also, there's this system on YWS known as 'The Buddy System' where a new member can choose an older member to be their mentor and show them around the site. The mentor answers questions, gives you tips and reviews your work so it's a pretty sweet deal since all you have to do is be new. I'll leave the link with you in case you decide to check it out.

Nice meeting you!

Heather xxx

Welcome to YWS! I loved your story, it brought me to tears. The part where his mentor gave him a stick of gum right before the mentor died was truly touching. I also loved that big fight scene that involved all of those falling rocks. It's amazing how you were able to describe the mad dash to safety so well. My only real nitpick with the story was that it was a bit hard to read with the invisible text. Only the period at the end of the story didn't hurt my eyes while reading it. Next time I would suggest a better font.

Sorry about that, I couldn't resist after reading Kitty's post! Still, I wouldn't object to reading something else that you wrote that has a bit more to it than one punctuation. Maybe something with a semicolon and a period after that. Sorry, sorry, I shouldn't tease. I do hope that you do post something more to this site, whether it's an introduction, some reviews, or a piece of work. After all, that's the best part about YWS is the responses that you'll get by posting.

Welcome to YWS! Hope you enjoy your stay!