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I have chosen to take the right path,
Live life with fewer mistakes committed,
Avoid doing most obvious wrong things,
But misleading surroundings are leading me astray.
They are these braggarts,
Insulting my intelligence with filthy, misleading advices.
Badgering me into doing their will.
Boasting about how clever they are.

I'm not big on the setup of this. It seems a little too chunky. maybe..

I have chosen.
to take the right path,
Live life,
with fewer mistakes committed.
Avoid doing most obvious wrong things,
But misleading surroundings,
are leading me astray.
They are these braggarts,
Insulting my intelligence
With filthy, misleading advices.
Badgering me into doing their will.
Boasting about how clever they are.

That seems to flow better to me.

I have fear of expression.
Try so hard not to be judgemental.
Compromise, pretend as if I agree with their doings.
I watch these ignorant people,
Doing what’s against what I believe in.
They deny the truth,
Justify what’s wrong just because it’s done by them.
Convincing themselves they are living the truth.

What is that?

In this aworld of compromises.
Committing wrong,
has come to acceptance.
Committing right,
has come to denial.
Love has become a game,
Everyone wants to play part in it.
I see them hob-knobbing with their partners,
Looking cosy and intimate,
After some time they’ve had enough and move on.
This is indeed a game.

I like the this is indeed a game part.

I’m no better person than anyone.
But I believe,
Living life the right way is worth a try.
Just have to give it your best shot.
I have Chosen my path.

The title of this poem is Chosen path Call me crazy, but I think that should be slipped somewhere in there.

Good job though. I like the message, and it speaks volumes to me, in the way that the MC is trying to convey the right not the wrong.

Congrats! I really liked it!
~drama

Okay, so the DramaLlama grasped most faults and flaws and also alot of the things that was good with this.
I don't agree with her on how she wanted you to change the first stanza, I like the structure of it, there were a few lines that should be shortened down to ease the flow though but overall - it was good. I also like you great use of descriptive words and you use great imagery. So, my impression of this can be summoned with the word; Pretty Awesome!
I'll give you 4/5 neat little spiders

Good Luck & Keep Writing

// Demoness

Ok first I would like to say a state of mind helps in poetry and you have that so the poem was excellent decribe in great detail and you can tell whan writer put his/her heart, soul into their work.Because poetry is like a gold if you put your passion into it , it will shine and reader love people who put everything to make what the poem is.And to send a message to what their trying to say and if there trying to make point in their life.keep writing

I love this!!!!!!

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