Seas of deception

Your Mind Said
Yes
My Heart
Said No
My Body Said Yes
My Arms Say Go
I Can AnyWhere In Life
If You
Take
Me
There

I have to say this peice is awsome and relaxful because the writer must put his heart soul into his poetry.
keep writing

Hi! I'm Demoness and here's my review of you beautiful poem!

Deception is here,
Deception is there,
Deception is with her,
Is there a truthful place?

I sail in these seas,
A wounded sailor,
But every time never willing to give up, I find this line a bit odd, the wording sounds a bit wrong to me... also it's a bit too long. I think it would be enough only to write "But I will never give up"
In this sea storms what am I to do? This line is too, a bit wickedly worded - Either you meant seastorms as one word or otherwise I think you must write "At sea, in this storm, what am I to do?"

Ready I am to give my all, Personally I think this line would sound better as; "I am ready to give my everything"
Sacrifice even my own life for her, Here, either scratch the word "even" or put it at the beginning
But I guess she never understands,
The much love I have for her.

How am I to trust again,
Its not like trust is a choice,
It has to be earned,
I am willing, but tell me how.

- I like this stanza very much, the narrator is obviously struggling but it's hopeful! *pointing at the stanza above*

Now that I am ship wrecked again, I think this would sound better as "Now that I am a wrecked ship again,"
Will I repair the boat again?
And continue with this dreadful voyage?
All the horrors of the sea?

Do I keep my hope alive for calm waters?
Is there even such a thing like calm waters?
Is there such a place like heaven?
Sailors like me, do we ever get to rest? - I sence a little Robert Frost here at the end, I like it

Now I'm done nitpicking, so here comes my overall impression; I like the journey, and the narrators struggle with lies, truth and desires. I do wish there were some more descriptions of this girl... who is she? Does she symbolize the sea or is she a human girl there with him or far away... a mermaid perhaps.. I feel like I need that clarified

You get 3½/5 icky spiders for this piece!

Good Luck & Keep Writing

// Demoness

Deception is here, Deception is there, Deception is with her, Is there a truthful place?I presume you are referring to Earth, then don't put a general word like place, use 'world'.
I sail in these seas, A wounded sailor,This was nice But every time never willing to give up, In this sea storms what am I to do? I don't quite feel that these flow in well. What am I to do is very unnatural. Try to be natural in poetry that helps keep a good flow.
Ready I am to give my allgive up all sounds better, Sacrifice even my own life for her,
But I guess she never understands, The much love I have for her.I ges she'll never understand, how much I truly love her
How am I to trust again, Its not like trust is a choice, It has to be earned, I am willing but tell me howThis doesn't seeem to have a rhyming scheme, or simply doesn't fit in here. ASgain, be natural.
Now that I am ship wrecked again, Will I repair the boat again2 agains in here, repetition can lose concentration.? And continue with this dreadful voyage? All the horrors of the sea? Do I keep my hope alive for calm waters?The sentence seems not to fit in again.

Maybe you are a natural english speaker or you're just very intent on believing that poetry is complex. It isn't, let it flow from your soul and just pour it out unedited. Yes, sometimes to keep a good rhyming scheme you'll need to alter your stanza's but remember not to over do anything.
The feeling and idea was nice, the inspiration was good and so was the theme or idea. I just hope you can feel more comfortable when writing your emotions. Hope this review helps.

This poem is beautiful!!!!