So, if I'm getting this right, it about this person/thing, that appears beautiful, and yet is also ugly on the inside, but if you look reallly hard, you can try to see her true beauty? Interesting.
All her petals have tore
Personally, I think it should be torn instead of tore. It sounds better, but it doesn't really rhyme.. Huh.
The poem was pretty deep, and it shows to many of us a lesson.. I guess. Beauty's inside ugly that's hidden by beauty. This should further explored..
So hey! This was quite amazing! Love, love loads of Love to this! It could've contained a bit more imagery perhaps but I still find you grasp the meaning of "Show rather than Tell". I have one little nitpick though, only it is my limited english that makes me hesitate at this word but "Beauty was CAKED to her shell" it did seem odd in my ears. Other than that though... I can say no more than NICE JOB and give you... LOOK! FIVE out of a total of FIVE icky, sticky spiders!
Good Luck & Keep Writing
// Demoness
"Some say the world will end in fire; Some say in ice. From what I've tasted of desire I hold with those who favor fire. But if it had to perish twice, I think I know enough of hate To say that for destruction ice Is also great And would suffice." - Robert Frost
