In a never ending race
Always moving
Never changeing
My legs moving
Up and down
Up and down
always
Till I die
the day I close my eyes
The end of the never ending race
the crazy case
I call life
Jogging in place
In a never ending race I liked these two lines, they were great!
Always moving I feel like punctuation would be nice. It just makes it easier to read, in my opinion.
Never changeing Changing.
My legs moving
Up and down
Up and down I liked the repetition here, it went back to the Jogging in place bit at the beginning.
alwaysWhy do you suddenly switch to lowercase? Also, it seems like now you are getting dangerously close to being too monotonous. It keeps going on and on, which I know is the point, but still.
Till I die
the day I close my eyes Again, shouldn't the be capitalized? And I think it would sound better if these two lines were switched. Till the day I close my eyes,
Till I die. But, it doesn't sound bad the way it is.
The end of the never ending race If you do decide to add punctuation, there should be : here, I think.
the crazy case
I call life