This is BEAUTIFUL! Seriously...I'm sorry for what you went through (hugs) But the positive thing is pain can release as incredible writings like this one.
Formerly EmilytheNovelist REL stands for Rachel, Emily, Lauren, the initials of my triplet sisters and I “I wish my stove came with a Save As button like Word has. That way I could experiment with my cooking and not fear ruining my dinner. ”
Well, I'll agree that writing is something you can do right! One of many by the sound of it! I can't describe how much I enjoyed reading this poem, as it's format was one that particularly appeals to me. Congratulations are in order for an absolutely spectacular piece of work. Keep it up! I look forward to reading more from you.
Some people walk in the rain, others just get wet. ~Roger Miller
Here I go I fell in love with this work of art after the second stanza You truly painted a picture with your words and I am... I cant even say
My mouth is actually hanging open in aw Just fyi
Now, for the helpful tips that I was thinking as I read through this piece
Everything you said not only sounded honest it sounded awful, and I truly believe everyone has some pretty awful moments, days, weeks, or years while growing up. If I was you I dont think I would be looking for the review that says "Oh my god I am so so sorry all of that happened to you" but that's just me. And because I am me I will not say that. I will say that I do not believe every poem has to rhym but this one could have used a little bit more flow to it, Maybe you could try certain stanza's having the same amount of syllables or something. Writing about the past is one of the hardest things to do, I have tried many a time, and I believe you did an amazing job. I just think it may flow a but better if you were to speak to the reader a bit more. Maybe guide us into the story line a bit more after the first line. IMOP I LOVE the first line and you may want to try having the first line, double space, give us some details, and then throw us into all of the "I remember's" Just some of my thoughts
I write for the same reason. I've had a lot of pain in the last few days? weeks? months? I don't bother keeping track of the time. I'm so glad you turned to writing. You have so much talent, I can hear it whispering of meaning and truth, I can see it swimming in the words. PLEASE!!! Keep Writing, Bel
A falling star fell from your heart and landed in my eyes. I screamed aloud as it tore through them and now it's left me blind. Florence and the Machine, Cosmic Love
