The way she makes me feel.

Leaning in slowly, careful not to smear her make-up,
I gently place my lips upon hers, becoming lost in time.
Unaware of all around me, I am placed in a kind of trance,
A deep reminder of my hearts content, a solace of time.

Her arms wrapped around me, and mine hers,
I am declined to let go, to lose something dear.
Completely apprised of her oddity and zeal,
I am yet again placed in this inevitable trance.

Laying still, her body next to mine, I close my eyes,
Savoring every second I’m with her.
Lost in time, I find myself once more,
Oblivious to the world, captured by love.

As I begin to stop and think about our relationship,
I realize that love is very stressful…But with her,
It all seems so natural, like it’s meant to be.
And without it, I’d be lost like I was before.

Love, without her, would be like a bloomless spring.
Love, without her, would be like a snow-less winter.
Love, without her, would be like a cold summer.
Love, without her, would be like a fall without leaves.

Love, without her, couldn’t ever be the same.
It would be meaningless, like it didn’t exist.
Love, without her, is unthinkable.
Because without her, I wouldn’t want to love…

I would just like to say really quick that this poem completely sums up the way I feel about my girlfriend. Thank you for writing it. It reminded me of how I feel.

Hmm you seem like a nice guy. I liked this... It was sweet, beautiful, and touching. The similies were amazing. Even though some of the poem was repetive, it proved that you really loved her. I could feel your emotion. I think the beginning flows well, but then you start using larger words that make the simple-ness of the beginning collide. Other than that, I liked it. It was very well written.

Best wishes,
Nessa

Even though the rhyming can do with some work, I liked your poem very much.
The part on the end where you started every sentence with- "love, without her" was moving and pretty.

I, personally, don't connect very well with your poem- But that's due to my beliefs and such, and have nothing to do with your work.

So- a bit of work on rhyming and weight will really improve your works, but aside for that, it's remarkable.
Don't give up on your style, and keep writing.