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meganTQ
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Tue Jun 14, 2011 3:55 pm
meganTQ says... · Tue Jun 14, 2011 3:55 pm
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PixieStix
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Tue Jun 14, 2011 9:58 pm
PixieStix says... · Tue Jun 14, 2011 9:58 pm
I love it But I think the rhymes could be improved some. You made details and I love that so much!!!But could use some more.

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Tue Jun 14, 2011 10:13 pm
XxMattxX says... · Tue Jun 14, 2011 10:13 pm
I'll add this to my reading list and reserve a review space!
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BlackInk
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Tue Jun 14, 2011 10:23 pm
BlackInk says... · Tue Jun 14, 2011 10:23 pm
I love it But I think the rhymes could be improved some. You made details and I love that so much!!!But could use some more.

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I agree with her. THe words rhyming abit more would give it abit of a better flow but overall, its really good. Job Well Done!

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Wed Jul 06, 2011 2:17 pm
Cailey says... · Wed Jul 06, 2011 2:17 pm
This was good, I really liked your revised version. However, the line, "for the fire burns when the tide turns." Didn't fit quite right. It just didn't match the rhythm. But, it was a good poem. :) Keep writing.
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