This is really good best I'v seen so far! And thanks for the review I'll make sure to change the stuff u'd mentioned, keep on writting I'd love to see more of your work
Although I don't have any helpful comments to improve your piece, I just wanted to say that I liked it just the way it is!
Not anymore. I wish your heart would thaw this way.
I thought this line might be broken up into two lines, because it's two different sentences, but I don't know much about the structure of poetry, so maybe not. I think it works well either way!
<..> Kat
Watch your thoughts; they become words. Watch your words; they become actions. Watch your actions; they become habits.. Watch your habits; they become character. Watch your character; it becomes your destiny. ~Unknown