love sucks

as i sit here and listen
all i here are words of love for him
you killed me inside
youve filled me with hate and anger
but i am still kind
im still here for you
im not giving up
you are beauty in my eyes
you may feal for him
as i feal for you
you may not feal perfect
but in my eyes you are
your every thing ei have ever wanted to be
are you surprised
i feal this way because im blind
im blind to the fact that you dont love me
im blind to the way theat you act towards me
im blind to every thing about you
except that you are every thing that i want to be
and the beauty i see
you hurt me and you dont understand what it is like to die inside
when the one you love denies you
you dont know what it is like to think
that the one you love is dead
love to me is dead
and its your falt

Punctuation and capitalization. YOU NEED THEM IN A POEM, don't listen to the sterotypes. Your poem... too common, make it stand out. Do something exciting, there are soooo many love poems about unrequited love and love that didn't work out. So enough criticisms, for doing a common theme, you did it well. Keep Writing!

Good. Has a lot of feeling in it, makes me think about my relationship and what i'm blinded by. I like that in this you made me think, I like stuff that makes me wonder about my life and myself. You did a very good job! One nit-pick You might want to check on your spelling before posting something but that's it

Hey there! Chibi here.
So, as Ignatius said, this poem really needs a grammar check. Spelling, capitalization, punctuation are just as important in poetry as it is in prose. Below's my nitpicks. Red's stuff that I've fixed, blue is my commentary.

skylermorgan wrote:#FF0000 ">As I sit here and listen
all #FF0000 ">I hear are words of love for him#FF0000 ">.
#FF0000 ">You killed me inside#FF0000 ">, Cliche line...
#FF0000 ">You've filled me with hate and anger#FF0000 ">,
but #FF0000 ">Iam still kind#FF0000 ">.

#FF0000 ">I'm still here for you.
#FF0000 ">I'm not giving up.
#FF0000 ">You are beauty in my eyes,
you may #FF0000 ">feel for him,
as #FF0000 "> I feel for you.
#FF0000 ">You may not #FF0000 ">feel perfect You used feel three time in the last three lines, try using another word.
but in my eyes you are.

#FF0000 ">You're everything I have ever wanted to be#FF0000 ">.
#FF0000 ">Are you surprised#FF0000 ">?

#FF0000 ">I feel this way because #FF0000 ">I'm blind#FF0000 ">.
#FF0000 ">I'm blind to the fact that you #FF0000 ">don'tlove me#FF0000 ">.
#FF0000 ">I'm blind to the way #FF0000 ">that you act towards me#FF0000 ">.
#FF0000 ">I'm blind to #FF0000 ">everything about you#FF0000 ">,
except that you are every thing that #FF0000 ">I want to be
and the beauty #FF0000 ">I see This line doesn't make sense, I suggest cutting it out.

#FF0000 ">You hurt me I think there should be a line break here and you #FF0000 ">don't understand what it is like to die inside#FF0000 ">,
when the one you love denies you#FF0000 ">.
#FF0000 ">You don't know what it is like to think
that the one you love is dead#FF0000 ">.
#FF0000 ">Love to me is dead,
and its your #FF0000 ">fault. The ending was kind of confusing...so this guy's crush is dead?...but I thought she was in love with another guy...

So overall, this was an okay poem. You did put some good feeling into this, which I liked. But the poem as a whole is somewhat cliche. There's just so many poems about unrequited love and whatnot, and it's tough to make one stand out. What I would suggest first is do a thorough grammar check on this poem, then take a good look at some of the lines and see if you can get your point across a bit more creatively.
Keep writing,
~Chibi

Hello random person in whom I have never met before;)
Welcome to Young Writer's Society. Any questions can be answered by me. Look at my profile. You may just find something you like.

I really liked this poem. I feel no need to do a grammar check since that has already been done, but just remember to capalize your I's (that a huge pet peeve of mine).

You certainly put a lot of emotion into it. Emotion is always good in a poem. But might I just say don't be afraid to break it up into stanzas. Stanzas will make it look a little nicer and have more meaning. Just break it into another stanza when you feel there's a new topic, different emotions, or if you just want to do it by lines. If you like you can PM me and I can give you suggestions (There's a PM button by the person's user name. PM stands for pesonal message.).

The last two lines:

that the one you love is dead
love to me is dead

I was reading it and thought the word dead was overused and didn't flow very well. That could just be my opinion.

The poem as a whole was great. It flowed nicely and had so much emotion. Just work on grammar and division of stanzas:)

Good luck! *Clicks follow*