This Drama Never Ends

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''I know what I did was wrong, but I meant no harm.'' I was sitting at the guidance counslers office explaining myself. I can feel the sweat drop towards my forehead. Liz, Nicky, and Angelia were sitting next to me in the hard wooden chairs.'' They don't belong here! It wasn't even their fault! They were just brought into this by mistake. Don't let them get in trouble, please,'' I loked hard into my counsler cold eyes. But it was like starring at the wall. It was completely useless. '' Why don't you tell me from the begining, tell me the truth.'' I stll can't belive it ever can to this. Her cold voice was serious and frightening. I had closed eyes on the word 'truth'. The room got silent. Four pairs of eyes were now layed upon me. I took a deep breathe, and began back to September....
'' Jiselle! Don't forget our little mission! '' Those were the words that Laney had said to me. Alex was the mission. Laney has liked Alex since elemantry school. Personaly, Alex was just a random guy who shared four periods with me. He really never was important to me. I would hear his name from time to time, but that was it. It never got farther than that. When Laney found out that both Alex and I shared the same interest in music, she was thrilled. She came up with the mission. The plan was that I was suppose to become great friends with Alex, then I would get him to like her, and finally, Alex would be Laney's. I was stuck in the middle of students all cramped in together in the hall, while I was walking to math class. I walked into the hell hole in my usual mood: grumpy and tired. The desks had been arranged in rows, which basically meant a new seat. I looked up at the board and spotted my name ' Perfect! Not only am I in the front, but I have to sit next to Alex. Urgh.' I made my way to the front of the room and set down my bookbag. I started taking out my agenda when a voice startled me from behind. '' Hey? Do you have a pencial I can borrow?'' I looked at him as if he came from another planet. '' Um, no. Sorry, this ones the only one I have.'' He turned and asked the girl behind me. She too shook her head no. I watched as he asked every single person for a pencial, but they all said no. Alex sat there with no pencial. He then turned to me '' Your in four of my classes. Right?'' I just nodded. '' Your Laney's best friend.'' I just kept nodding.'' I'm I ever gonna hear your voice? Or you just gonna keep on nodding your head to everything I say? " I grinned. '' I speak when I want to speak. '' He looked at me surprised. I just smiled at him. Our teacher sudenly walked in. '' Please finish page 338 for bellwork. Also, please take out your homework so I can go around and check it.'' I watched as Mrs. Conners walked around checking every single paper. When she
finished, she began talking about pre-algebra. The lesson was pretty short, so she let us all do our homework for the last 20 minutes that were left. I was starting my homework when I felt a finger poking my side. I immediately jumped. '' I was just going to ask you for a pen. I didn't know you were ticklish.'' A devous smile spread across Alex's face. '' Your really going to start poking my sides? Really? '' He just kept on grinning. I turned around and began doing my homwork. All of a sudden, I felt a pair of hands start tickling my sides. I tried hard not to laugh, but it wasn't working out for me. '' Jiselle? Please share whatever is making you laugh. We all do want to hear a good joke.'' The whole class turned their attention to me. I felt my cheeks start to burn red. ''Sorry,'' I mumbled. Mrs.Conners just gave me a weird look. I heard someone start to snicker in the seat next to me.'' This was your fault ! Thanks so much.'' I manged to smack his arm. ''Wow, you are really ticklish.'' I looked at him as if he were stupid.''No shit, Sherlock.'' I just rolled my eyes at him. I turned to face my homework. I hadn't even answered the first question! I had just maneged to put the pencial on the paper, when the bell rang. ''Sucks to be you.'' I gave Alex the meanest glare I could possibly tink of. He started to back off a little I quickly gathered my things and went start to sixth period. I walked by myself all the way to my science class. I had manged to settle down in my desk, when a pair of hands poked me at both of my sides. I turned to face a grinning lokoing Alex.''Don't you have anything better to do than tickle me all day?'' He started to think.''Mmmm, no. Not really.'' I wanted to just shot myself. ''You think your so cute don't you? Well I don't think so, I perfer blondes.'' He looked at me with wide eyes, but then he started to laugh.''What gives you the idea that I'm flirting with you?'' I turned around in my seat, mad. ''Look, I'm sorry if I got you mad.''
I turned around slowely. '' It's okay.'' Our teacher then walked in. Alex made his way to the other side of the room. The whole period, Alex's eyes were starring at me. When my eyes finally met his, he would turn away quickly. The whole period, I sat there writing notes. When the bell finally rang for seventh, I wlaked out the room fast. ''Hey wait up!'' I maneged to spot Alex running to me. ''Alex, I have to really get going. I have P.E next, and I don't want to be late.'' Alex then began walking with me.''You don't have P.E with me?'' Alex just looked at me.''I know. But I wanted to walk you.''i started to protest.''No, you don't have to. I don't want you to be late.'' Alex just shook his head.''Why would I want to go to class early when I can be late and spend more time with you?'' He won that argument at the end. He walked me all the way down the stairs and then he turned to go back up to his language arts class.I arrived at P.E confused. Laney was the first to approach me. ''Did you guys talk?'' I simply nodded.''Thank you so much for doing this for me! I'm so lucky to have a friend like you.'' She then squeezed me into a hug. I walked to my locker and started t change. But my mind wandered off to how Alex was flirting with me...
''Love is the Weapon.''




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This is...this is not good. It's riddled with grammatical and spelling errors the plot is bland, there was a sudden, unexpected swear word. It's got a sort of stereotypical plot. It's a little confusing. It needs a lot of work. A lot.
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i didnt really get it
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I'm not quite sure how to feel about this. I can see that you have the ability to write a good high-school romance, but this was not the best fulfillment of that ability.

For one thing, there were several fundamental spelling, tense, and grammar errors that could easily be corrected with just a couple of quick read-throughs.

Secondly. It seemed in the beginning of the piece that you were going to make this a story where the beginning doubled as the ending. However, it did not do so, and you provided no viable link between the beginning and the ending of the piece. Characterization of the 'Prince Charming' of the role was ragged at best. Well, to be perfectly honest, there was little to no effective characterization. Not only regarding the 'Prince Charming' role (Alex), but also in regards to all of the other characters.

Setting, imagery, time! Details! These things can really hook a person on a story. However, you provided minimal details, a limited frame of reference regarding time, and the only imagery that I could connect to was being tickled. As for the setting, I only got that I was in a school. I had no idea where the school was, what it looks like, the hallways, classrooms, nothing. If you aren't going to focus on the big picture as a whole, what works a lot of times is little-picture. To apply it to this situation--If we aren't going to know what the school looks like, okay. But tell us how the desk looks, all the little scratch marks and engravings in it. These minute, seemingly meaningless setting details can do a lot to submerge a reader within the world you have created.
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