This is great! I love how each stanza begins with the same phrase, followed by a mood-setter completely different from the previous stanza. It's short, sweet, and to the point, and was a pleasure to read =]. Like others have said, the vocabulary really sets the stage in this. Great job!
That was really beautiful and I think that it is easy to relate to. Your rhyming was very good and you were very creative and I adore that very much! I like the way you write and I really do hope that I will see more writing like this from you! Thank you for posting it, and again, I loved it!
If you prick us, shall we not bleed? If you tickle us, shall we not laugh? If you poison us, shall we not die? If you wrong us, shall we not revenge? The Merchants of Venice-Shakespear Lovethelifeulive, andlivethelifeulove
That was as deep as Lake Baikal, it was awesome, I felt the emotion come trembling out of the words and into my head, it was perfect. I couldn't have loved it anymore. Your vocab was awesome, it just fit with the scheme, this was very well done. Keep Writing!
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