Running

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as the path that you sometimes walk brings you down,
when you hesitate every single time to put a step further,
because you are scared, because you are alone.

as the path that you sometimes walk will lead you to a test,
a test that scared you to the core and make you stop in your stride,
because you are helpless, because you are not what you believe,

yes, i doubted myself.
and feeling lost....
MISS WEDNESDAY




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It's alright :) kind of dull but has a good meaning to it. Try to open up more and be more descriptive. Use unusual words and phrases! :) Also, you should have made this longer then it would've been more exciting :) Thanks!
Remember me for who I am, Not for who I was




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Hello, Gheala here.
Hm.. You obviously need to practice and write more poetry because that one wasn't quite good.
A poem should be longer than this to deliver a nice and emotional feeling to the reader. This, unfortunately, didn't. I didn't quite understand the main point and it didn't interest me.
Try to find some poetry writing websites to help you improve your style and also give you the basics you'll need to write better. I found you a website, which seems to be a good one: http://www.poetrymagic.co.uk/approaches.html

Try it and also keep writing and posting your poems here. You'll get good reviews.
Also, I see that you haven't capitalized any letter in your poem. The first word in the beginning of the sentences needs to have the first letter capitalized. And the subject "i" needs to capitalized as well.

Remember, you need to understand the topic of the poem as though you're writing a story. You need to feel it, so you'd help the reader feel it as well.

Good luck.
I'm back to my YWS after months of disappearance, hoping that I'd gain the immunity of books and quills against the harmful realism of our world.

In case this made no sense, I'm just saying that I'm happy I'm back!



Percy fell face-first into his pizza.
— Rick Riordan, The Mark of Athena