Inside of a Star [Chapter Five]

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Hey there 3,

Looks like I'm reviewing this story once more!!! Must say I like how your plot is moving. Can't find anything really wrong spelling wise or grammar wise....not that I'm good with it. I liked how this plot moved to me just right. not too slow and not too fast. I like the little scene and the friendly scene between the main character and Jericho. Haha. Really liked it and most definitely like this part ^^

He was hesitating to ask me something, but he assumed that I would say no. I smiled for the first time all night, wiping my eyes just in case there were stray tears. My heart was still hurting, but at least I wasn’t alone. The urge to cut was so powerful, but I had to hide it for now. I hated hiding things from Jericho, but what did it matter if I didn’t tell him that I indulged in self harm? Hell, I never told him that I could feel his emotions.


Really liked it and I can't wait to do more. Keep up the good work and Buenas Suerte. Happy Writing and best of wishes. May you receive many helpful reviews. ^^
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