Giving Thanks

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Snoink
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Tue Nov 15, 2005 6:45 am
Snoink says... · Tue Nov 15, 2005 6:45 am
:(

I thought this was going to be happy, dammit!

Anyway, it's good. I like it better than many of your poetry, mostly because the style is a little bit more traditional and I'm a very traditional gal. And the rhyming and metering was definitely there. It sounded very lyrical. But rather sad...
Ubi caritas est vera, Deus ibi est.

"The mark of your ignorance is the depth of your belief in injustice and tragedy. What the caterpillar calls the end of the world, the Master calls the butterfly." ~ Richard Bach

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Tue Nov 15, 2005 4:58 pm
Angel17 says... · Tue Nov 15, 2005 4:58 pm
The poem was going well but the last lines seemed a bit rushed
Real poetry are those with the best words in the best order

~~~~~~~~Mandy~~~~~~~~~
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Wed Nov 16, 2005 2:01 pm
Chevy says... · Wed Nov 16, 2005 2:01 pm
Grrrrr...stop showing me everything and then posting it on YWS because then I don't get the excitement of coming here and saying, "Oh, look Brad wrote another poem for me to read!!!" :(

Hmmm I can't remember what I said before besides it made me want to give you a big hug but you know I loved it. I like the last stanza the most. I guess because we were just talking about it right before you showed me this. Good job,Brad...and I hope you find something to do for Thanksgiving that's fun...
when there's nowhere to go, it's time to grow up.
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