Nice, can't comment on it so much, but... found a mistake here:
Trust is so worth acheiving.
It should be "achieving".
I thought that this line:
(Hey look that rhymes!)
was pretty good, it makes the reader more involved in the poem.
Julie, a sucker for romance, historical fashion, medieval fairs and blues music. Add photography and you already know me 50%. The rest of me you'll discover through my writings and my photos.
Welcome DarkVanilla, I only have one thing to say really. I loved it, I was a good poem. Keep writing!
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