I really liked the way you made this poem rhyme. I personally just enjoy those types of poems better. I think that overall this was really good. It is short and sweet, well in a sad way of course. My only suggestion is that you get rid of all of your exclamation marks. When I read it, I didn't think that they were necessary. It seemed like it should be calmer type of poem. Oh, and by the way I really liked your title, and how it was your last line. It really tied everything together.
Great work!
I'd like to think I'm creative... instead of just plain weird ;D
Hey! I thought this was very nice, and since everyone else already did a good joy pointing out the mistakes I will just praise your poem.
I loved the uniqueness in the flow and rhythm you used; it made the poem fun to read. I also like poems that follow a strict rhyme pattern, but this was good. I hope to read more of your work!
-Jessa
Love is like a butterfly, it settles upon you when you least expect it. Drew Marrymore
