Sado-Masochism

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This is one of two poems I wrote with Calligraphy for the YWS Poetry Pairs contest. We're trying to decide which to submit for the contest, and we'd appreciate your advice. Here's the link to the other poem. topic77753.html Oh, and one more thing: the non-haiku verses at the beginning and end are intended to be that way. Just saying.


It's a circle.

Pain. I can taste it.
Scream if you must; I like it,
This complete control.

Pain. I can feel it.
As it rips through my body,
Then I feel alive.

Pain. I’m glad to give.
It’s not my fault. They like it.
It is a cycle.

Pain. I need it now.
Alone, I do it myself.
Stopping hurts too much.

Blood. It's death for you,
But life for me. Give me this,
and I will love you.

Blood. A steady stream
From my skin, embracing me.
It's all I deserve.

Blood. Pumping through us.
It needs fresh air, to get out.
I just help it some.

Blood. My skin itches.
I need to get it out. Now.
I just need some help.

Love. Yes, I love you.
You love me too, right? So what's
A bruise here and there?

Love. Yes, I love you.
See the cuts, the scars, the tears?
I did this for you.

Love. Reassurance:
If you love me, prove it.
You love it anyway.

Love. I will prove it.
I will endure. I want to.
You can’t make me scream.

Pain. It all comes down
To this. Taste my pain and yours.
Parasite and prey.

Pain. I live for this.
For you. Total submission.
Cut me one more time.

Pain is good to give.
No one can make me stop. Never.
We feed off each other.

Pain. I worship it.
It was my first friend and last.
I just can’t stop now.

It’s a circle.
Last edited by Warrior Princess on Fri Mar 18, 2011 4:58 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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With all the force of a great typhoon,
With all the strength of a raging fire,
Mysterious as the dark side of the moon.




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Wow, that was brilliant. There's not much to critique on it and the way you placed each stanza as a haiku it was really creative. I don't remember reading a bunch of haiku's forming one large poem before and the way it all turns back to the last line and the first ; it's a circle is really cool.

This poem is really inspired, and I can feel a raw emotion there even if that wasn't intended it was still there. :)

Keep writting ,
- you guys are sure to be good competition.

~Written.
To fly away on gossamer wings, sheer as night's reflective glow, I would could I cradle child hecate to my breast.

|| Wisp. ||




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Hey,

I've read both of the poems and I definitely like this one more. :D I love the emotions and the descriptions. I PICK YOU, PIKATCHU. :D

~Jas
I am nothing
but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted
apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's
or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.

~*~



You know what the big problem is in telling fantasy and reality apart? They're both ridiculous.
— The 12th Doctor