peace at last

The poem needs punctuation to dictate some kind of tempo: At the moment it is just a mesh of words in a column. However you do have a strong opening, the two d's of dive and deep work very well.

Peace At Last



Dive in
deep mysteries await
although
you? have no fate.- The rest of the poem refers to "I", it gets confusing when you introduce another party that wasn't there before...
No conclusion comes
flash
pain as loud
as drums.
(My?)Heart beating
lost in deep blue
drowning.
Flash
in lost truth,
hope,
(and) fate
dreams fad(ed)
in the mist
as I drowned.

Nice poem, just try to make it longer and help the reader understand exactly *who* is talking. Reveal a little something, to make it pop. Make your poem special. That's all.
Punctuation is key, my friend.


Keep on writing!
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-Jojo