Inocence As We Know It Chapter Two: Serenity High

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"Elle wake up! your 15 minutes late, Elle!" I turned around to see my mom tugging at my duvet.
"Go away..I dont want to go to school."
"You have no choice,get up and meet me outside in 15 minutes, 5 to get ready, 5 to get dressed and 5 to have your oatmeal downstairs!." I threw a pillow at her, put she was already out the door, I stood up lazily and walked to the bathroom. I had a quick shower, threw on my uniform, brushed my hair and ran downstairs. I didnt bother to eat, oatmeal was the definition of yuck! I slid into the passengers seat in moms ford and we drove off.
"Now Elle remember, do not get into any arguments with those cheerleader girls and make alot of friends!"
"I`ll try.." I kissed mom goodbye and ran off
"Elle your lunch" She called after me, I ran back grabbed it and ran inside. The school was massive and modern looking, I went up to the receptionist and introduced myself.
"Ah yes..Elaine Westford..your first class is music." the receptionist told me, she was a short pudgy looking woman with tangy brown hair and big blue eyes.
"No there must be some mistake, I chose art not music!"
"Im sorry but it says music here" she turned the computer screen to show me.
"Well change it, I cant sing or play any instrument please!"
"Elaine, hurry off to your class your going to be late, I will try and see what I can do." she thrust the timetable at me without glancing up. I groaned to myself and walked down the corrider, what a great welcome, she didnt even show me my class. I looked at the timetable, ok Im here and the music room is over.........there!
"Im so sorry, I wasnt looking where I was going" I had bumped into a tall girl with short red hair, she was quite pretty to be honest.
"Its ok accidents happens...by the way do you know where the music room is?" She asked
"No thats what Im trying to find on this map." she pulled the map off me and stared at it for a second.
"Er it was upside down..the music room is there" she said pointing at a line on the map.
"Oh my bad"
she laughed at me "Hahaha, your funny, by the way Im Alexis but my friends call me alex"
"Im Elaine but my er...parents call me Elle"
"We should head off to class now shouldnt we?" Alexis said with a loop sided grin.
She grabbed my hand and we raced off to the music room.
"Oh Miss Caseys, its glad you could join us eh?"the teacher said mockingly
"I was lost"Alex replied shyly
"And you are...?"The teacher asked looking at me
"Elle Westford....new kid?"I answered,making sure not to make eye contact with anyone.
"Oh yes Miss.Westford,take a seat"
I looked around for a seat there was two, one was beside a pale looking girl with hazel eyes and the other was beside a lightly tanned girl with dark green eyes. I sat beside the pale one, she looked more intresting.
I looked around for alex,she was at the front, she looked back and smiled at me. After music I had to go the hall for school assembly,I saw a group of cheerleaders sitting on benches near the entrance, I avoided eye contact again.
"Who are you?" a girl with wavy blonde hair asked me.
"Im Elle,I am new"
"Elle as in elephant" she sniggered
"No Elle as in if you dont get the hell away, I`ll punch your fake nose in" Alex piped up.
"Like you could" The bitchy blonde girl replied
"I bet you once, I can do it again" Alex said with a smug expression
"Whatever."The blonde girl pushed past me and went back to the bench where her clones were all sitting.
She pointed at me and they all laughed, great I already have enemies.
"I see you met Taylor" Alex said
"Yeah...shes not very friendly"
"No one is, just stick with me and dont talk to them, they can make your life a living nightmare"
"What do you mean by "they"?"
"As in Taylor&Lilac, they are best friends and last year all throughout freshmen year, they bullied me so bad..and I mean really bad."
Lilac,the name ringed a bell, I racked my brain until I remembered where I had heared it...The We Hate Lilac Monroe Club.
"Are they the popular people of the school?" I asked
"Go Figure" Alex said with her loop sideded grin
After assembly, I followed alex to the lunch room, we sat far away from everyone. Just as I was about to sit down, a tall brunette haired girl walked up to us.
"Thats Lilac Monroe.." Alex whispered
"Hey you!" Lilac shouted pointing a finger at me.
"Me?" I asked stupidly.
"Yes, I just came to warn you, touch my friend again and I will break your finger off, is that understood?"
"I didnt touch anyone!" I protested
"Lying makes it worst, you better watch yourself!"
"And if she does`nt, what are you going to do about it?" Alex asked with a sly smile.
"Then there will be trouble, Big trouble"
"Elle stand up for yourself and stop letting this drag queen, throw you about!" Alex said
"Im..n-not afraid of y-you" I said quietly
"Speak up you rodent" Lilac shouted
"Does deaf come with your retarded package?" I asked bravely
Everyone in the lunch room turned my way..."This she just ask Lilac,does deaf come with her retarded package" I heard someone say, "Ohhh Lilac is mad now..You better run"Someone shouted at me. But before I had a chance to move I was tackled to the ground by Lilac, "Watch yourself rodent" and with that she walked off.
Everyone rushed back to their seats and carried on eating, alex helped me up.
"Good try apprentice, it took me a longer time to figure out what to do about does bitches, but the solution is to fight fire with fire."
"I`m not allowed near fire.." I chirped
"Gosh, not real fire, we are just going to give them a taste of their own medicine..."




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Hi there! Lupis, here to review today. :D

So, you've got some good ideas here--plenty of conflict (I like how you didn't drag the intro on forever) and I like your character--she's not obnoxious, but we can see her starting to stand up for herself.

But, first things first. Your grammar could use some work. I didn't go through and point out all the errors though. Why? You don't need to worry about them yet. This is a first draft, and you'll get to them later. In fact, the only reason I'm pointing this out at all is because I found it hard to understand sometimes. So in the future, before you post a chapter or whatever, we'll thank you if you run a spell check or at least read it through a couple of times.

Secondly, I didn't really like the first few paragraphs. Their only purpose was to go through the MC's routine, and develop her character a bit. Charry development--good. Routine--bad. It's not interesting, and even though you glossed over it, which was nice, it isn't necessary to the story, so why not just skip it? This is pretty early on, only chapter



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