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I thought I'd read along a bit to figure out what was going on before I commented.

Especially because of chapter 2. It was really confusing until now. I guess the "man-eating" pack is the one lead by Malik and Kammal's pack is the one covered in chapter 2?

I actually really like this. Normally I stay as far away from wolf stories as possible because one of my friends is obsessed with them, but I don't mind reading this. So far, I've loved the way you've phrased things. It lets me see exactly what you're talking about. And not just sticking to one person's (or in this case, werewolf's) POV definitely fills out the plot.

The only thing I can really suggest for you to do is explain how these people become werewolves. Why do male-only packs sometimes become man-eaters?

Still, very interesting! I will be reading along. ^_^
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