Thing of darkness

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Night walker
mortal stalker
blood drinker
quick thinker
hungry killer
mind willer
wood hater
no data
life stealer
blood dealer
fast mover
never the loser
"The rabbit always squeals in the jaws of the fox, but when has another rabbit ever rushed up to save it?" Damon Salvatore
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Neat poem. Fun to read, the pace is fast enough that a person don't stop to think about what he or she's reading, just get flashes of whatever cool image comes to mind. The 'mind willer' line threw me off a bit, however. I'm not sure 'willer' is a word, and it just sounds a tad too silly. Dunno what you could change it to... 'thriller,' maybe?

Fun read, keep writing!
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Really good piece...
Short, neat and everything is in a perfect flow...
Its a good thing that everything sticks with the heading and nothing is off the track...

Keep up the good work...
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Very fast paced and entertaining. Very enjoyable!!
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