Hallo buddy! Glad to see you writing again! This time there were only a few grammar mistakes, so let's address them.
Why I'm being so pulled to it?
Why am I, it should be. The way you have it reads out: why I am...?
Through a glass wall I can see televisions and all of them are saying the same - breaking news eh.
At least put a comma after breaking news, so it's not as awkwardly read.
But by who though?
Comma after who. Again, makes it less awkwardly read. Also, grammar rules, y'know. :}
You also had a few comma splices, but since I use them like air, I feel hypocritical pointing them out.
So, my dear friend, I want you to listen to what I say and not what anyone else says. This was fantastic! The first paragraph literally defined my feelings, and in the end it brought out your character. This was a gorgeous piece of work, and by no means cliche or "without meat". I truly hope you continue writing like this.
Oh, Brightlord Tumul! How unexpected it is to see you standing there! I didn't mean to insult your stupidity. Really, it's quite spectacular and worthy of much praise. — Wit (The Way of Kings by Brandon Sanderson)
