With tights and toothbrushes

Just a bit of a mess really. I'm not really expecting any responses for it, but maybe a bit of critique would be nice.

"Have fun!"
My kiss
blows
from my lips to his cheek.

Lost in the wind
and away it
flies.

Never to be received.

Running round the
corner.
To see a girl.

With tights on her head.
With tights on her head?
With tights on her head!

"Faster Faster!"
those words fade and
swirl
into the falling snow.

And trudging
trudging
to see a head.

A toothbrush head
with bristles
sticking
out of fallen snow

But where... where
is the handle?

Some things are just unexplainable
Maybe I'll never know where the handle is,
Maybe I'll never understand why the girl had tights on her head,
And maybe I'll never understand why the kiss missed the target.

I like this poem because it is true. There are some things in life we will just never understand. Is that what the poem was about because that's what I got. Great job! I actually really liked this!

Hey there Crimsona! I’m Lily! Nice to meet you!

So, all in all, I really like this poem. It feels very wild and disheveled but with the theme, it works very well. Two things, though, did kind of bother me.

With tights on her head.
With tights on her head?
With tights on her head!

This stanza is really reinforcing the point you’re trying to make, I understand that, but I think it might be too long of a line to repeat. It just feels bulky and it’s probably a bit unneeded.

Some things are just unexplainable
Maybe I'll never know where the handle is,
Maybe I'll never understand why the girl had tights on her head,
And maybe I'll never understand why the kiss missed the target.

The bulky feel factors into this stanza too. It went poetic all though the poem but then you get to the stanza and it’s heavy and feels a bit like prose. That, though, could be fixed with breaking up the lines a bit.

The imagery, too, I really liked, especially the idea of a girl running around with tights on her head. Very odd but it makes the reader curious. Much cool!

If you have any questions, you can leave me a message on my wall or through PM.

~lilymoore

I love your theme. It's very interesting. Lilymoore got both of my nitpicks. Like I saaid I love your theme.