Purple - Chapter 3, Part 2

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Hey Carly Truth again to review!

It was clear that Raleigh liked Archer too but she was not my concern.

This should be past tense like the rest of the sentence.

A lot of his friends were graduating and the band wasn't going to be as good because there were so many good players leaving.

Same here.

Was he going to miss me specifically

And here, I'll leave the rest for you to pick out and correct.

This was just awesome.

Love the sarcastic tone here

Archer started walking towards the back of the bus.

I believe this should be 'started walking'

And then he started acting like he was gay. He started unbuttoning his shirt and it was just showing off his bare chest underneath.

Suggestions suggestions..

After he went back to the bathroom to put his undershirt back and joined his friends at the front of the bus and I decided any hope on this bus ride was gone.

There's a missing and in there.

I gave her a confused, what-are-you-trying-to-get-at-here, sort of look.

I tried to keep my face as composed as possible

Missing one 'as'

“I don’t know. I don’t want to know exactly when it’s going to happen. Whenever he feels comfortable doing it, I guess.”

Okay, we’re starting the movie and they’ll just have to deal with it,” Harper said and moved into the living room. The rest of us followed.

Just a small typo here.

Alright, this is really coming along great. I've got to say Archer's way of asking out is really cute in a geeky way haha, I was laughing so bad, it's so cute. The only thing I would say would be to be sure to keep writing in present if you want to stay in present and stay in past if you want to stay in past tense. Right now you are flipping back and forth between the two and it's a bit confusing. It's a very common mistake we don't even realise we make but it's so much easier to read when it's all in the same tense.
I'm curious of what's going to happen with those two. Keep on writing!

-Truth-