From Earth to Paradise.....

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From earth to paradise...


On the beauty of the road,
I mused, with metre of the wheel’s note.
Over the traversed tracks the cart rolled and rolled,
To the destiny of the journey-old!

From the window, chanted all in spree-
“Hey, O passer-by! look at me.
Like autumnal leaves today I can fall free,
Nothing can bind this spirit elated in glee!”

The heat of summer does not taint me,
Neither before monsoon, I bent my knee.
Red roses can no more pamper my soul,
My thirst presently can only be quenched by the whole.

‘Whole’-achieved solely on the union of trinity today,
From earth to paradise, I am on the way…..




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I really liked the way your wrote this, though I did have to read it a handful of times to make sense of it. The description and words you used pronounced what you were trying to say, though, and I throughally enjoyed the rhythm.
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hey, thanks for your comment. it took sometime for me to reply to this one, but i am happy that you liked this one! :)




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I really like this poem, good work.

The heat of summer does not taint me,
Neither before monsoon, I bent my knee.
Red roses can no more pamper my soul,
My thirst presently can only be quenched by the whole.

Great stanza, I love this one.

Good write. ;)
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i dont really understand what this is about, but i like how it seems kind of hopeful and dreamy.i love the line " i mused with the metre of the wheels note."
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I'm not sure what this poem is about but I got an image of someone going on a journey. Maybe one that they have wanted to go on all their life.




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Yeah, I didn't really get this, but it was good. The first stanza didn't ryme as well, and some of the stanza's were a bit off...but quite good.



Who wants to become a writer? And why? Because it’s the answer to everything. It’s the streaming reason for living. To note, to pin down, to build up, to create, to be astonished at nothing, to cherish the oddities, to let nothing go down the drain, to make something, to make a great flower out of life, even if it’s a cactus.
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