My England

Be my England,
Watch me as I walk along the River Thames
Away from the city,
Foot in front of foot
On that island.

Be my England
And watch me from the clouds
As the raindrops fall,
Drip drop
On my face.

Be my England
And be the rolling hills,
Cliff to sea,
Sky above, endless.

Be my England
And dance with me through the streets,
The dark of night,
The glittering lights,
Of the village.

Be my England,
Name us kings and queens
And put me in history books,
Shining brilliantly:
Crowned jewels.

Let’s be England,
Holding hands and crossing the sea,
Rowing, stroke by stroke
Across the channel
To land.

Hello, Rain here, I really liked this, I do have a few comments and suggestions though.

Red- Needs to be changed to be grammerly correct.
Blue- Suggestions based on my opinion.

Be my England,
Watch me as I walk I think you should make that one line two, likw this...
along the River Thames
Away from the city, << Should be lower case, unless you meant to have a period after "Thames"
Foot in front of foot << Lower case
On that island. Lower case

Be my England,
And watch me from the clouds << Lower case
As the raindrops fall, << Lower case
Drip drop Lower case
On my face. << Lower case

Ok, so, when you use puncuation in a poem, you need to have the correct letter cases, like I have pointed out...

Be my England,
And be the rolling hills, << Fix the cases
Cliff to sea,
Sky above, endless.

Be my England
And dance with me through the streets,
The dark of night,
The glittering lights, Ok, so here I think this would sound a lot better as "glistening" it just seems to sound better to me... Just a suggestion from my opinion...
Of the village. << Fix cases...

Let’s be England,
Holding hands << One line to two...
and crossing the sea,
Rowing, stroke by stroke
Across the channel
To land.

Hope this helps,

~Rain~