I Love You...

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(I hate men...they make life too complicated.)

I hate you
for the names you said,
the mean things you did
and the tears I shed.

I love you,
you stole my heart,
caught me with your charm,
then broke my love for you apart.

I love you for the fire I feel,
the passion for what you do.
I hate you for the words,
I hate you for making me love you.
Everybody sing like it’s the last song you will ever sing,
(Tell me, tell me do you feel the pressure?)
Everybody live like it’s the last day you will ever see.
(Tell me, tell me do you feel the pressure?)
~Paramore (because I'm a parawhore)




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Bravo and yes I agree! Men can be so confusing at times, so much feeling went into this, I can tell. Only one thing I saw wrong was this;
meggwriting wrote:[i]
I hate you
for the names you said,
the mean things you did
and the tears I shed.



It seemed to be a bit choppy at the 'I hate you part' it broke the rhythm of the poem but, still overall great job!
Pain is beautiful, when you feel pain you know you're alive. -Criss Angel




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Hey... I really liked this poem, its simple and gives great contrast to the too raw emotions and how they can both be present at the same time. I think people could relate to this poem. However I a few verses would be great, give the reader some more of those emotions, it keeps them hooked and makes it unforgettable! Or perhaps a flash back to when love and hate suddenly collided and you feel caught between that devotion but also a deep hatred for them making you feel this way. Add a full stop at the lines you want to give impact to.... like the first I hate you I would put a full stop there. Since the title is I love you it will shock them and make them want to read on.

Well I hope I helped a little... If you ever want any help or just someone to talk to. I'm here
Love and best wishes
Brown Eyed Girl xx :D



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