Young Lady of the Moon

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You gave me great vibes, once,
Young lady of the moon.
Every night when you were out
I gazed at the starry sky,
And there you were, just hanging
Like nothing could bring you down.

And nothing could bring you down.
Down to my level, on the surface
Of this blue, blue, blue planet,
There was nothing to do here
But sing the blues
While you sing the good song.

Young lady of the moon,
You keep hanging there,
There’s nothing I can give you.
I can’t help it if I lust for you,
And your chalky white face.
Yeah, that round white face.

I’ve only got one simple request, Miss,
Just go black
And never come back.
I can’t bear it when you always return,
So next time you go, don’t come back.

Every time I see you,
I feel I can fly,
Like you fly, with the stars,
So far away, in the serene blackness

Of the void.
But it’s suicide
For me to fly

And one day I will fly
So high

And, like a shooting star,

Fall from the sky

And Die.
I refuse to acknowledge the existence of this signature.




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I love the blues. So this sits good with me, but I think you need to incorporate a chorus into your song. Something that makes sense after all the stanzas. It will bring the whole thing together.

P.S. I love your non-signature.
Those who dance are thought insane by those who don't hear the music.
Those who fit well into their world don't generally go about changing it.




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Gender Female
Points 240
Reviews 98
I love the blues. So this sits good with me, but I think you need to incorporate a chorus into your song. Something that makes sense after all the stanzas. It will bring the whole thing together. Keep up the wonderful work.

P.S. I love your non-signature.
Those who dance are thought insane by those who don't hear the music.
Those who fit well into their world don't generally go about changing it.



*gestures in butterfly meme*
— BluesClues