Trying to find myself

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Fatimah wrote:To kogarasumaro143,Changing the line you suggested does sound better, as I did aim to emphasise the fact that eyes are watching me. I think I may change it but I've not decided if I am going to submit the re-draft with the changes.. If I do I hope you review my edited poem again :)


Oh sure I will... Just follow me and my YWS page http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/page.php?id=107.. Leave me a message there if you have a poem that you wanted me to review... thanks... :D
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Will do, thankyou kogarasumaro143.. I will follow you and I hope you do the same!

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