Shall I compare thee...to definitely not Shakespeare!

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Shall I compare thee...to definitely not Shakespeare!

Poetry as archaic as the air;
Iambic pentameter and couplets,
Writing this poem is the task to bear,
Rhyming scheme and the Shakespearean sonnet.

Pen ambling across the page calmly;
Seeking subsequent rhyming verses;
Spewing, oozing, vast pools of imagery,
To convey the mood with apt word choices.

Adding the metaphor is the stuffing,
While the simile is like orange yam,
Deprived of them it is not worth feasting.
Quatrain, iambs there is no place to cram!

How did Shakespeare do this, one would mutter;
Hundred and fifty four sonnets, stunner!




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Hi there!
First off, I love the title. It's pretty awesome!
Anyway, I didn't see any grammatical mistakes, which is very good. I really have no nit-picks about anything. The only thing I saw was how the first stanza thing sort of rhymed and the rest really didn't. I know it probably doesn't really matter, but it's the only issue I had with it, and I thought I should mention it.
The whole topic of the poem is really original. It was sort of comedic and serious at the same time. Brilliant!
So, other than that one thing, it was a really good poem. Keep it up!
Feel free to PM me f you ever want anything else reviewed, and welcome to the site!

-Emily :D
"A stranger in a strange land" ~ Exodus 2:22




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Great poem! Definitely something to make you think! I liked how you used more sophisticated words! it helps.

Keep Writing!

Good Luck! feel free to message me with any questions!

Good Luck!
XOXO
Colie18
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Hey! I like the title, it's what caught my attention and I actually laughed out loud! :D .... Now as far as the actual poem, I liked it as much as the title. I like your descriptions and I also like your word choice! I can not think of one bad thing to say... Scratch that, it had to end haha. Good job
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