The Contract 2- (Brief beginning)

How you doing?

Holy Baloney!

Are you really fifteen?
I wasn't expecting something quite like that. You didn't copy or anything?
Amazing!
I also thought this one is a major candidate for a motion picture and I think you should really get this around.
It sounds like a great story so far and I think it's great how the story is coming from the assassin. Is that so it's easier to show that he wont show his name?
There were a few grammar errors but their alot easier to fix than a storyline!
Brilliant job Ryan.
I can't wait to here more!

Cool!

the start had me a bit confused, but it got better and better as it went along.

It sounds like it's going to be great!

keep up the good work

Bonni Bee must be a pretty smart girl!
She kinda spelt it all out well.
I hope that the beginning would clear up once I read the first book.
Why are the robbers going in to the house?
I thought that the assassin character is really well thought up and I definitely don't want to bump into him anytime soon!

Ryan wrote:‘Who the hell are you?’, he choked.
I grabbed a cushion as the bullet went though the careful stitching and into the man’s chest.
‘Happy Birthday’, I said.
I walked out of the house and drove off in my car, the information on all five targets in the back-seat.

this was very well written, i particularly liked this part, you definatley have something here, good job.

Yeah, I gotta say I love this stuff.
The Contract is my favourite book so far on YWS so please post more soon.
Thanks.

I must say that I honestly know who Ryan is.
He is a good friend of mine.
I have also read alot of his sequel 'The Contract 2' and seeing I haven't seen you in a while Ryan, I'd like to tell you here and now that it would be a good idea to post more of your story, even if it gets changed by your editior.
That is all.