The Great Kidnapping (part two)

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And so, fans (hah, I just love being able to use that word) here is the second part. I'm actually getting on quite well with it, so many story ideas and things to do. :D

EDIT: Here's a link to Part One.
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Hey Jen! It's one of your fans, :P.

So what do I have to say? Not much. I obviously loved reading it, and the way your word the narrations and the dialogue is definitely enjoyable. : )

My only suggestion for next time would be to make Radicat's body a little more realistic-looking. In the box just after he licks your character, I noticed that the curve of his shoulder is a tad wonky. Remember that most cats have pointy shoulder blades. ;)

Anyways, that's all the critiquey stuff I have to offer you. I loved it, seriously, but you already knew that. :D
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Whut? He broke my bubble? Why that little ... *grumbles*

As usual, awesome. :wink: No critiques - just keep it up!
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