Gray~ Prologue

My name is Estefani Delilah Jordann.

I am 16 years old.

I go to Seaside High School.

Most people call me Essie.

My halfway birthday is nine days away.

My life is pretty great, but I'd never admit it.


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People call me Callum DaLore.

People say I'm 17 years old.

People think I'm nothing but a human teenager, going to a human high school with my human siblings.

My name is not Callum DaLore, but you don't get to know my real name.

I am not 17 years old, but you don't get to know my real age.

I am not a human, and I guess you'll have to figure out what I really am.

Interesting prologue from what I read though there is not much to run with on this.
It could use a bit more back story on were they came from or how they came from.
Despite its length I'm still a bit hooked on who Callum really is and whats with the secrets.
Ill read future work on this just please make them a bit longer.
-Dawn

Well I'm excited! I do want more though!
Sounds awesome! Can't wait

Dun dun dunnnnnnnnnnnnnn!

This sounds like a good writer's starter... that is, you know how you sometimes need to have motivation to write so you write something cheesy, yet oddly intriguing, that would never be published, but it helps the writer finish the daggum story anyway? This is what it seems like to me! So, while I would suggest not putting this in your final manuscript for the publisher, please continue this! It definitely looks promising.

xX_white_shadow_Xx wrote:My name is Estefani Delilah Jordann.

I am 16 years old.

I go to Seaside High School.

Most people call me Essie.

My halfway birthday is nine days away.

My life is pretty great, but I'd never admit it.


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People call me Callum DaLore.

People say I'm 17 years old.

People think I'm nothing but a human teenager, going to a human high school with my human siblings.

My name is not Callum DaLore, but you don't get to know my real name.

I am not 17 years old, but you don't get to know my real age.

I am not a human, and I guess you'll have to figure out what I really am.

hello, white shadow.

*first, bear with me because this is my first review in five months.

i like the prologue--i love the characters and how you characterize them. i expect it will be a first person POV?

i can't wait to read. haha. to keep me somehow occupied while struggling with college.

-telle.

Well, this definitely and interesting starter...a good draw-in, anyway. You might want to tweak the format for both of the little "bios" of the character, so that it doesn't look like your just repeating the same thing.
Also, will you be writing this in parts that are both first person for both characters, or will it be one first person, and one third person POV?

That's all I really have...nice start!


~Reddy