His eyes show passion, his hands strength, his mind power, but his heart no love. He walks past everyday, walks past this draining place and says nothing, just looks. As i watch from the window i wonder if he remembers. I wonder if he remembers the times we use to share and the tears we use to shed. Although I see through abroken window of shaddered memories I can stil e see the past. He must look through a dark, foggy one. His mind, i know works because of the way he proves himself. With such pride, such integritty. Ionly wish he knew.
I notice his voice drags when he speaks and his eyes never look. He just walks, doesnt stop. Never thinkstwice about what mite be in my shop i dont think. Im not so sure hes him anymore.
Her eyes show passion, her hands strength, her mind power, and her heart so much love. I wonder if she rrelises i miss us. I miss what we use to be, how much we use to cherish. I miss waking up in the morning and looking into her eys and thinking i love you. I know she must think i dont remember all we went through as one but when we broke into two how could i have forgotten. She told me that i must never forget and i promised her i wouldnt no matter how much time passes between our next meeting or how many days go by that we dont speak our memiories will never depart from me.
I notice her words speak to others but her shop begins to die. She watches but does not speak. Her eyes follow but she never stops me. She never thinks to talk to me or show me she stile cares. Im not so sure shes her anymore.
One day the man walks past and stops. The womans eyes widen. He turns and faces the window and mouths something. She doesnt understand. He pulls out a notebook and a bright red sharpie and begins to scribble something down. Sh ebegins to really wonder. All that his hands seems to do is move at un-describable speed. Shes astonished. He holds up the note, it reads this:
I LOVE YOU, I MISS YOU, I REMEMBER EVERYTHING, WILL YOU MARRY ME?
She walks slowly to the door, opens it and steps outside. She grabs the notebook and pen from his hand and simply scribbles the word:
YES....
Overall, you need to fix this story. I like the idea on how change the perspective from the two characters but it's a little bit confusing, it's hard to tell who's talking and not, who's narrating and doing the action. 
Also, before you submit this piece, make sure you review it first because there were many mistakes like: Spellings, Typos, Apostrophe, Grammars, Spaces...etc. You need to make sure you're confident enough before you submit a story. 
