Mother, Understand

Mother, you don’t understand
The emotions I hide away
For every time I tell you
You just look the other way.
You yell and cuss and throw a fit
Over everything I say.
Can’t you tell that all I want
Is for you to say “okay?”
I need your understanding, Mom,
So please just listen once.
Yes, this might be hard for you
But I’m older than I was.
You raised me right,
Don’t you understand?
I’m ready to be free.
I’m not asking for much,
Just your eyes and your ears
And a little sympathy.
So let me go and I’ll let you know
My troubles along the way.
Momma, I’m grown now
Don’t hold my hand
Like you did when I went out to play.
Mother, I’ll always love you
If you just let me go my way.

Aww

I think the fact that this is addressed to a parent makes it so much more touching, especially with that line 'I'll always love you.' It's like... pleading, rather than the usual teenage tantrums against their parents. I like it.

My main issue is that the rhyming mixes up a bit about half way through, which makes it fall apart a little. If you can't make the rhyming work, it's better to just take it out. Splitting this into stanzas would hugely benefit it too.

Hope this helps. Keep it up

your rhyme scheme made me LOL.

its sing-songy and maudlin.

Here is my suggestion: tell us something specific that happened with your mother. Maybe tell us a story.

Also: you don't need to punctuate the end of every line, a line break signifies... a break.