Legacy

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There is a cave
Beyond the void
Beneath the abyss
On the other side
Of eternity
Off the edge
That God does not even tread
There, bundled inside
A wooden chest,
There is an old thing
A dead thing
An evil thing
Waiting
Waiting for his maid Pandora
The thing is Sin
And Sin is calling
Calling from a cave
From beyond the void
Beneath the abyss
On the other side
Of eternity
Off the edge
That God does not even tread
Inside a wooden chest
Made from the last tree
Of the ruined Earth




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Oooh. I really like this. There's not much to nitpick here. It's just good. I love the imagery and the flow. *clicks 'like'* I really like the refence to Pandora and her box. I couldn't help smiling while I read this.

Anyway. Thanks for making me smile and the beautiful poem.

~Scarlett.
"With friends like you, who needs a medical license?"
- Paimon, Aether's Heart


“It's easier to ask forgiveness than it is to get permission.”
- Grace Hopper.




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I agree with ScarlettFire on this. It's elegant, and simple. The rhythm is very smooth, and the imagery is straightforward yet symbolic at the same time. Really good!

-Allie
"A writer is a person for whom writing is more difficult than it is for other people."
-Thomas Mann



It had a perfectly round door like a porthole, painted green, with a shiny yellow brass knob in the exact middle. The door opened on to a tube-shaped hall like a tunnel: a very comfortable tunnel without smoke, with panelled walls, and floors tiled and carpeted, provided with polished chairs, and lots and lots of pegs for hats and coats—the hobbit was fond of visitors. The tunnel wound on and on, going fairly but not quite straight into the side of the hill —The Hill, as all the people for many miles round called it—and many little round doors opened out of it, first on one side and then on another.
— JRR Tolkien