Last edited by CelticaNoir on Mon Feb 14, 2011 4:25 pm, edited 1 time in total.
I am the workingman, the inventor, the maker of the world's food and clothes. I am the audience that witnesses history. - Carl Sandburg, I am the People, the Mob
If you couldn't tell from my first sentance, this little review is not going to bother with that horrible thing called ... grammer.
Anywho, yes, I loved it! I liked the feel of the scene (the way you described the morning, and such. Oh! I knew exactly what you were talking about!) and the characters. They seemed very THERE. You know? Quite real and lifelike, I was impressed by that.
I thought that the bit about the bus was a little cunfuzzling, but I'm sure that was just me and had nothing to do with your writing.
Keep writing! I loved it and will be waiting for more!
"With all due respect, sir. I distrust your hat entirely."-- Jae Marquis
