Falling Down

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Jentte ran across the open field,without a care in the world.She was running after a large butterfly.Then she woke up with a jolt, she was back in her bed with three kids watching tv in the living room.
"Kids!" I called in to the living room,they came running."You guys want some breakfast and then the park?"I asked."Yeah!" the boys replied. After a breakfast of pancakes with cut fruit.They headed out to the park. She gave Camron his cell phone so he could call if he needed,then she went over to the far corner of the soccer field. This is where her dream had taken place last night. This was the park that her father took her to that horrible day when she was chasing her butterfly. As she chased her butterfly her father started talking to a man then the sound rang through the air making her butterfly take flight she looked towards her father, but all she saw was a lump laying the grass and her father was nowhere to be seen.







Jennte
personality:she is a upbeat person when she is not at the park
hair:brown
kids : four one dead
gender;female

Evangelina
Personality: Loving best friend
hair: Black
kids: none
gender:female
Last edited by dasiamari on Sun Apr 11, 2010 12:18 am, edited 3 times in total.




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I need more people I don't really know how this works but I really need some one to be named Evangelina and other people can pick there own names
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This isn't how it works; I'd suggest you take a look at other storybooks to get a better idea.

Pretty much, you need a set plot, some rules, and a character template. Browse through the other ones, and maybe even try out a few before you start one so that you know you've got the hang of it.

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Also, if you have pre-set characters, you may want to leave a short description of each so people who chose to be pre-set characters have an idea of what they're getting into. You should also fill out a character template for your character, your posts should be much more in-depth. Like Vanadis said, I recommend taking a look at other storybooks so you see how it's done.

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http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic60221.html

that's a link to the basics of storybooking.
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