Stupid punk song x)

Yeah well i wrote the music to this one day, and basicly just threw some words on top to make it complete, i didn't worry on rhyming and strucure, and i must warn you that it's quite offensive x)


I’m sitting in my room again
For the fourth night in a row
I can’t believe i’ve got no better place to go
I’m breaking up with everything
And drowning in my self pity
So jaded, always feeling fucking low

I’m self centred and full of shit
A self indulgent hypocrite
And nothings gonna get me off my ass
This world don’t mean a thing to me
But I’ll pretend that I know everything
Cause it’s the only way I’m ever gonna get laid

Chorus
I’ve got a fucked up view on reality
Cause I believe everything on my TV screen
But I never meant to do nobody harm
I’m a useless fucking waste of space
I’m always rude, and always late
So please stop me before I do any harm

Verse 2
The music running through my head
Is shit and over rated
But my friends all listen to it, so it’s fine
My friends think I’m a fucked up guy
Because I’ve got a fucked up mind
But I hate my friends, like true friends, anyway

Ending chorus
I’ve got a fucked up view on reality
Cause I believe everything on my TV screen
But I never meant to do nobody harm
I’m a hopeless fucking waste of space
And I’m always rude, and always late
So please stop me before I do any harm
I only ever wanted to hold your hand
It’s the reason I made this fucking rock band
And I’d never want to do you any harm
I only wish that you could love me to
But I guess you wont, dreams don’t come true

And erm… Fuck you.

Some of it is really really good. I especially enjoyed the part about being a self indulgent hypocrite. On the other hand, while I know it's punk, it seems that most of the cursing is just filler space, which is fine. However, on a writing site like this one, it's going to be obvious to most people that read this song. I would try to make some of the lines fit together with out as much of the cursing so when people listen to it the lyrics are important enough to hear.
I liked it though

thanks for the response i know what you mean, i was just writing these lyrics quickly so i'd have something to complete the song, and just used swearing to fill the spaces in which i couldn't think of anything better to put. If i ever go about putting this song into any worth while action i'll certainly try to cut down on alot the swearing with more worthwhile lyrics